Workshop for "The Hurricane"

I feel like this is a very well-researched piece. There is a real sense of insightful here, and even though I know nothing about surfing, I feel like I can believe how these characters act.

An issue I had with the writing was a bit of choppiness every once in a while. In the paragraph that began with "The storm bore down on the ocean..." I felt as though there should be tumultuous nature to this part of the story, however I felt like I was being given a chronological list of events. This does not true of the entire story though. The  paragraph that began with "I'd never surfed waves like this..." is an example of a part of the story that flowed really well, and did an excellent job of bringing me into the action as a reader.