This is a well-rounded story with a distinct beginning, middle, and end. In my opinion, that's 75% of a great story so I think you're in damn good shape.
I really like the way this story progressed. It didn't give everything away right off the bat, and it showed me more than told me. That is one thing I definitely look for in a story. The plot is really well-rounded, and I don't really think that it needs anything else. However, I did notice that the characters are a little flat, more-so the man than the woman. The woman is a surprising, interesting character while the man seems to be a stereotypical "manly-man," haphazardly thrown together for the woman to interact with. I think if you polished up your characters a little bit this story would be amazing.
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