Workshop for "The Secularist"

The word choice in this piece is really impressive. Not only did it aid in the flow of the story, but it made it very easy for me to visualize the events depicted. Also, the dialogue is really good and makes the characters more well-rounded. I kind of get a sense of who these people are just by reading how they speak. 

One minor issue I did have with the dialogue is the use of interruptions. I feel like there are too many. I know these can be important to having diversity in the language, but sometimes I felt that they were inappropriate or unnecessary. This could have been because there were so many of them. These were really the only things that were breaking up the dialogue and distracting me from the story.