This is a story about a girl (?) who was dealing with her mother's infidelity. It has a really strong start, and a very passive-aggressive vibe all the way through it. This piece is very one-sided, which is problematic because the reader will have a hard time relating to any of these characters.
This piece reads more like an essay than a story. It takes way too long to get to the plot, and there really isn't enough of it.
I'd like to see the narrator confront her mother about this, even if the mom dismisses it. It would be very telling about the personality of both the characters.
Also, on the narrator's part, I think we should see some hurt, instead of flat-out rage.
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